Your opinion about this poem--"flowers of life".all long suggestions and criticism is welcome...?

its been written by a 15 year old in 5 minutes,so judge it accordingly











"THE FLOWER OF LIFE"





Flowers,so full of love,life n beauty,


With occassional thorns to bring us back to reality.


Life's like a flower,all beautiful n sweet,


Until a thorn intervenes,


And then the thorns are all we look for,


To avoid and to forgone.





The beauty then turns meaningless,


And the flower itself full of meaness,


For that one thorn it unwillingly gave us,


We start disliking the whole flower and thus.


Forget the beauty and the scent,


That the flower shared and spent,


To bring a smile on our face,


As we kept up with the circumstances' pace.

Your opinion about this poem--"flowers of life".all long suggestions and criticism is welcome...?
oh i like this!


it's not exactly my taste, but i see the direction you were going for, and it was nice.





fix the spelling and spelling up a little though ;)
Reply:i like it
Reply:its go0od w/ tha rhyming but somhow dosnt quite flo n tha philosophy in it isnt xact


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